Ode to an apple tree
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This is definitely a rough draft. I feel further along on the actual powerpoint, but I'm having issues as it uploads to Author Stream. In either case, any feedback will be appreciated!
This is definitely a rough draft. I feel further along on the actual powerpoint, but I'm having issues as it uploads to Author Stream. In either case, any feedback will be appreciated!
I like it! Good use of sound and image to create a multimodal representation of the poem!
ReplyDeleteIt seems like your sound is not flowing through each slide. Is that desired effect?
What exactly are you having trouble with when uploading to AuthorStream?
Your Illuminated text made me think about....
ReplyDeletehow just adding a simple sound effect could do more than an instrumental song.
You should consider changing/adding/taking out....
I was surprised that the poem was only one line. I would consider adding the wind sound to the whole presentation. You can loop it.
What I like best about your Illuminated Text is....
I love how your words stand like a tree and then blow in like the wind. Your use of movements to match the words was wonderful.
Your Illuminated text made me think about....how animations really make meaning of words- great choices!
ReplyDeleteYou should consider changing/adding/taking out.... make the sound flow.
What I like best about your Illuminated Text is....the words blowing as if they were in the wind.
Your Illuminated text made me think about the circle of life. The apple tree grows and then falls. Very powerful!
ReplyDeleteYou should consider changing/adding/taking out.... There seems to be too much time between slides 4 and 5. My shortening attention spans can't handle the lack of action happening in the last two slides. You may want to work on creating a smoother flow between the last couple slides. I loved what you did with slide 1. :)
What I like best about your Illuminated Text is how you used vertical placement of the word "apple." It seemed to grow upward just as a tree would. Nice job! :)
Your Illuminated text made me think about....
ReplyDeletehow sound really helps. I liked the wind sound when the word winter came down!
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your sound didnt make it through every slide.
What I like best about your Illuminated Text is....
The way you had apple going up the tree!
Your Illuminated text made me think about standing in the snow on a winter day.
ReplyDeleteYou should consider adding a transition sound effect at the very beginning of the last slide. I know the silence is great for effect to go with the text. But, I think one sound may help smooth the transition from one slide to the next. However, I have absolutely no idea on what you could use. So, I'm stretching a bit here.
What I like best about your Illuminated Text is the first slide. The sound, the picture and the text together just seem very powerful.
Your illuminated text made me think about-
ReplyDeleteapples and the constant change in season.
I feel you should consider making it more understandable. It seemed to not flow smoothly.
I liked the multiple affects of the words you chose, especially for the piled up leaves.
I thought about the changing seasons.
ReplyDeleteI completely understand your frustrations with the music, that is why I uploaded mine as a video to YouTube. Also, the long ending- I don't know if this is intentional, but I would shorten it.
I really like how you made the text resemble the shape of the tree trunk and the branches.